clairelutra
chez-pezeater asked:
@stardusted answered: petty jealousy
Marinette searched the cake from all angles, squinting at the frosted flowers and strawberry halves neatly arranged over the smooth white surface of the delicacy.
She failed to find any sort of flaw whatsoever.
“But how…?”
“I told you, didn’t I?” her goofy teenage boy of a partner said, entirely too smug. “I am a cat of many talents.”
(He couldn’t exactly tell her that thirteen-year-old Adrien Agreste had had far too much time on his hands and access to both a very large kitchen and the food channel, but he did have many talents, so it wasn’t a lie or anything.)
Marinette, the clumsy bakers’ daughter with countless failed cake decoration projects under her belt, pouted.
chocmarss
fickleminder
Make is a pretty ubiquitous verb. It’s an easy verb. A catch-all verb. You can make it work just about anywhere.
I’ve made a point of calling out weak words on this blog.(x,x) Make is one of the worst offenders.
‘Make’ doesn’t describe anything. It doesn’t clarify actions for the reader. In fact, ‘make’ hides your verbs. It obscures actions from the reader. If there was such a thing as un-describing something, that’s what the verb ‘make’ would do. Even the federal government suggests not using it as a verb in their ‘plain language’ guide. x
Let’s take another look at those sentences. What are the actual things happening here?
The last sentence isn’t an action. Nothing at all is happening here. It’s a description, and not a particularly engaging one. The information here can be incorporated into more interesting statement, or at least presented in a more interesting fashion.
In each situation, taking ‘make’ out doesn’t remove any meaning from the sentence. It either gets rid of extraneous words or forces the sentence to give more information.
This isn’t to say you should never, ever use the word ‘make,’ but it’s an easy word to use. You don’t have to solidify the action in your head or search for the precise word you need. You can just throw ‘make’ in and voila! your sentence is complete.
Avoid the temptation.
If you absolutely can’t think of another word to use, put ‘make’ in there. Highlight it. Underline it. Mark it in some way. Come back to it later, when you have more time to pay attention to word choice.
Just remember to always use the strongest verb you can. I guarantee you, that word will rarely be ‘make.’
I AGREE WITH ALL THIS. Also applies to “say”!
Removing “make” and “say” as a default opens the door to a WORLD of more beautiful narration. (Of course, sometimes you do end up using “make” and “say” sometimes, but let this not be your comfort zone.)
bittenred
“Chat Noir,” Marinette’s voice comes to him, sweet and decadent as honey, “please stop hurting me. All you ever do is hurt me.”
He stares down at the akuma, heat shivering behind his wide eyed gaze.
“It’s because of you that I was taken. It’s because of you. You’ve ruined my life. He hurt me, Chat Noir.”
“Stop,” Chat says quietly, the rage a soft snarl caught in his throat. His hands clench around the staff.
creativecreepie
yoleisha
This’s something I’m working on it’s NOT DONE yet…..and I wanted to post it because I worked so hard on it and idk if I’m gonna finish it soo……..ye
It’s about…..what if the class, just the class , knew about marinette’s secret and how it will effect the love square
Hope you like it ♥
shishitsunari
silentwulv
ruinedchildhood